Pretty Crazy

That was the first second-person POV I've ever read. Even so, I think you did a good job on it. Wow, and it's in future tense. Kudos to you! Let's ...

Hey Isha! I really like those pictures of yours. For some reason, the one of the grass is the most interesting to me. Maybe because all the pictures have a ...

Fear has a funny way of ruining everything. It’s Burger. Wendy Burger. That was her name. Don’t blame her for it, though. Her Mom is Wendys’ biggest fan. And the ...

Hello, I like this story. I agree with the others that this is well written from a child's point of view. And the end is especially powerful. It's so sad ...

Oh wow, this is really cool! I agree with Celdover, I love your narrator! The mood throughout this entire chapter is amazing, energetic, and enthusiastic. I really want to read ...

Alright, here I am as promised. Hmm, let's see. Still liking this story- a lot. But there's one thing. It seems a little forced or something. Like you keep saying ...

Hello, I'm really enjoying this story, and I see you have chapter 3 up so that's where I'll be going next! But first, if you don't mind, there are a ...

I really don't have a critique. But just thought I'd say that this is really good! It almost feels like I could have wrote it. That's how much I agree ...

I enjoyed this a lot. It's very well written and brilliantly done from Lance's perspective. And you kept it real. Everyday characteristics in this story has made it believable and ...

I like the idea too. It looks like this has potential, have you written anymore? I'd love to see what happens next. But it seems really rushed. Writing something is ...

Hey, it's been a long time since I've done a review. But I'll try. :) Not only was that a good peice of literature, I think we can all learn ...

I agree with everyone that you've improved. Not much to say that hasn't been said, but there is one thing. Don't stop. You can go far because you have natural ...

Ooh that was intense. I haven't done a review in a long time so let's hope this goes well. A of now, I couldn’t care any less. Isn't it "As"? ...

I thought it was great- as always. But your killing me, more than ever I want to know what's going on. The story is enjoyable but it's almost torture that ...

Very interesting. I'm afraid I don't have much to say for this, so the review's gonna be kind of short. Poor kid. What can he possibly do now? Usually in ...